To the person wrote the #15377
Before I criticise your writing, I empathise with your dissatisfaction. I agree It is frustrating to see a lack of respect and honesty from a young adult who hasn’t experienced enough in life.
However, your writing is the result of the digested food. I won’t sugarcoat the quality of your writing, regardless of the story/experiences you wanted to share. If you think this level writing is worth of praise, your English writing skill is even worse than a high school student. If you wrote with this quality in IELTS test, you would score a 0. Enough...